Beginnings of a Spell - Feedback Encouraged

[Pagan Warrior]

Hey Gang,

I just started writing the other day and the little chant below is what came of it. I welcome feedback, and perhaps where I should take this to make it a spell.

My the goddes guide my spirit true
Grant me gifts of my pursuits
What I hold dear within my heart
My thanks to thee for thy imparts

[MonSno_LeeDra]

I find that spells tend to write themselves as the need for one arises. Frequently it seems the best laid and though out spells fall short of thier goal for we try to use others thoughs and desires as a source for what we think should be done.

Your verse seems very cyclic and rythmic to me. as I read it I though more or a mantra than a spell was being set in place.

Sometimes I believe we try to force fit something into a conceived notion of what it might be and fail to see what it should or could be.

From a truly personal perspective I'd say you wrote one strong mantra for connecting to your Goddess and calling her energy into or unto you.

Sometimes the greatest gifts are laid plainly before our eyes or wisphered into our ears, I personally think yours was very strong in power.

just my 2 cents for what its worth